Yamon - I am not going to watch a collaboration of games and analyze it in any great detail. Give me ONE game. One that doesn't exceed 20-25 minutes but incorporates a lot of standard/typical situations and I'll give you some pointers.
As it pertains to this video, I am not going to sit and take notes for you for a 70 minute video, especially one where the first game is you doing a gimmick strategy. I'll give you a few short tips: Cut out the fat and stick to the basics. Become really good at the fundamental strategies, rushing, 1 rax powering, dualing, tower wars, catting duals, counter dualing, etc.
As for that 9/s9 dual, I was planning on telling you not to Rax there because they can chop you, and sure enough I called it. Instead, put your smith there and put your rax to the left of the mill at 9, in such a manner that the mill is one space south of the rax (so peons don't pop and the easier building to kill isn't exposed to 3 potential melee attackers)
Also, you're VERY slow. Change that. Get showdog's APM program?
show a real game, no gimmick strats and stop playing slow
